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Wednesday, January 28, 2009

hunger-haunted wolves


gray house-cat trapped in thicket


snowflake on eyelash

3 comments:

Area 17 said...

I really this line:

hunger-haunted wolves

Wonderful and so accurate.

all my best,

Alan
The With Words Competition 2009

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Pat Trombly said...

thanks - tried to compare two images similar (one-sided conflict) yet contrasting (who wins - the domestic world or the natural world) - i'm trying to write 17 syllables that do their immediate job but also leave open a debate that could take up 17 pages - not sure haiku is my genre but it's a good exercise in efficiency

Area 17 said...

I wouldn't be worried about the 17 syllable aspect. Write a haiku that isn't much longer than six seconds flat when you read it out.

If you still want to do 17 syllables you can always do that afterwards, making sure the syntax isn't forced.

As the Japanese language systems don't contain alphabets and syllables I wouldn't try to do the same.

I just love 'hunger-haunted wolves' though!!!!